It's hard taking pictures in the dark. We went to see the Glowfari lanterns at the Oakland Zoo and this was my favorite photo. I like the composition with my daughter here looking at the clam shell but I always struggle with how dark is too dark and wonder if I should brighter up the subject a bit.
I really like your suggestion for reframing/reorganizing the shot. It would really capture that moment of awe a bit more intimately.