So, am I right in assuming that OP has untreated schizophrenia? Wtf is this word vomit?
Personal Storytelling Practice
At the end of every day, write about at least one of the most interesting things from the day. Try to get better at making the audience interested and at recognizing good possibilities of things to talk about, so you can connect with people better in real life. Avoid things that you wouldn't do in unplugged conversation, especially including images.
In addition to posting here, private journaling is an option.
Rules
- Be nice so this community can be a safe space for its purpose
A ghost just told me that a CIA glowie gave you a 1 day ban from this community because of your comment
Interesting idea so looking at the getting better part, some feedback:
- Your sentences were quite long and hard to understand in one read. The last part was easiest to follow. Try simpler/shorter sentences and way less commas
- 1 and 2 sound very neutral. This makes it less engaging for the reader, there was nothing much to relate to. The "this is communism" at the end of the Subway part was a good start. Share your thoughts and feelings more and reduce the objective descriptions.
- Section one feels unfinished. What happened after? How did others react to your ideas? Why did you choose these requirements.
Last but not least: the headline made me feel like I'm in aneurysm posting. The headline doesn't have to give away everything, try to find a common denominator and again: less commas. If you need more that 2, your sentence starts to get complicated.
Looking forward to read more about your days and give me a ping when you start mapping Germany, I can recommend a few dishes:D